20224 최준환: 2014

2014년 12월 6일 토요일

Final draft!

Final Draft

"Controlling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result?"

Everyone who lives in the earth and all of them, may be interested in well-being and their health. Also they may concern physical ability and physical activity everyday. Naturally, people are interested in how to enhance their physical ability and how to get advanced result in every activities. Especially, in sports games, players have to enhance their physical ability to make a better score. Then they have to do special things that can bring physical advance. Although there are many ways to improve their results, I think a concentration and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced score and enhanced physical ability the most than anything. Before starting, you should know the definition of a word, "concentration". Concentration on something involves giving all your attention to one thing. In other words, spend all of your concerns to it. Calming down one's mind is acting like control one's condition and state. Now, I'll tell you a article "Controlling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result?". I agree this article and I'll give you some reasons through many evidences that can prove my opinion.

I want to confine effect of concentration to physical activities. Controlling one's mind or calming down one's mind can influence the results of sport games or physical activities strongly. There is a experiment that prove that concentration can make advanced physical ability. According to STEMWiki Hyperlibrary's study, Concentration can bring advanced and a better result. Let's figure out specifically. The same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. These are true whether both particles are in solution or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater. Thus, naturally we can have advanced physical ability for getting a better result.

Likewise there is a experiment too. According to beverley high school, If you increase the concentration of the substrate in an enzyme controlled you will speed up the a chemical reaction. The reason for this is as follows: The substrate and the enzyme need to come into contact with each other for a reaction to proceed. When the two meet they join for a brief moment while the reaction is catalysed, before separating. If there are very few substrate particles in the solution, it will take time for them to bump into an enzyme molecule. Increasing the substrate concentration means the chance of the collision between a substrate molecule and the enzyme is increased also. A little like packing more people into a room. The more people there are the more people you would bump into. This does not increase indefinitely though. There comes a point when the enzyme is working as fast as it can. The time taken for the enzyme to catalyse the reaction when they come into contact with each other limits how fast it can go.Through this experiment, we can know effect of concentration or calming down one's mind.

Also, An adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability. We can know that physical activity can bring better results when we make adequate level of physical activity by controlling one's mind or concentration. Actually, according to my survey from 50 students, 42 of 50 students feel that their physical ablity is advanced or have better records when they control their mind and concentrate more in physical activities, like sport games.

Additionally, According to my case, when I play sports or do physical activities, I feel enhanced physical abilities and can have better scores when I calming down my mind and concentrate more than before in badminton, basketball, soccer, all of sports. So I search more in physical activities not especially in sports. Then, results are same. In every physical activities, I can get better score when i concentrate more.

From these we can know that controlling one's mind, condition and calming down one's mind during sport games or physical activity is very important things. That is because these behaviors can enhance physical ability and increase reaction rate, so they can get better scores. Also through these behaviors, they can control their mind stable.

I think Opponents who don't agree with my thoughts may say that a better result and concentration or calming down are not related. They will think that is just coincidence. However that is not realistic, just suggests. As I mentioned before, concentration causes a chemical reaction to enhance reaction rate more. These means that there are relations between concentration and advanced physical advance. Additionally, I think opponents will say that concentration is just one way of mental controlling and it is seemed that influence one's ability and results. However I think a concentration and calming down one's mind while sports game are the most important way to get better results. Although there are many ways, these are the most influential, powerful way. A chemical reaction and enzyme reaction in our body prove that.

Fth

Until now, I mention about "Controlling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result". As I said, there are many evidences why I think like these. Our body knows it, we know ourselves, result of research prove it. These are enough to prove this argument. What are needed more? Especially in physical activities, concentration and calming down one's mind have very important role. These are the most effective, powerful ways to make advanced results and enhanced physical ability. Already, many sports players know this and use in many matches. If you do these properly, you can get benefits from these in physical activities. Concentration and calming down one's mind is related with our brain, and control brain. So brain can control our body and make our physical abilities enhanced. These are not just coincidence. These are the results of body and brain's interaction. Thus, If you control or calm down your mind(escape from exited condition), you can cause advanced result and enhanced physical abilities.

APA citation + additional research

APA citation

Work Ability, Physical Activity, and Cardiorespiratory Fitness: 2-year Results From Project Active

An adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability in aging workers. Project Active is a randomized trial comparing a Lifestyle physical activity program with a Structured exercise program in sedentary
http://journals.lww.com/joem/Abstract/2000/09000/Work_Ability,_Physical_Activity,_and.12.aspx

UC Devis Chemwiki - The Effect of Concentration on Rate of Reaction
For many reactions involving liquids or gases, increasing the concentration of the reactants increases the rate of reaction. In a few cases, increasing the concentration of one of the reactants may have little noticeable effect of the rate. These cases are discussed and explained further down this page. Don't assume that if you double the concentration of one of the reactants that you will double the rate of the reaction. It may happen like that, but the relationship may well be more complicated.

http://chemwiki.ucdavis.edu/Physical_Chemistry/Kinetics/Rate_Laws/Reaction_Mechanisms/Reaction_Mechanisms/The_Effect_of_Concentration_on_Rate_of_Reaction#Contributors

The Effect of Concentration of Substrate on the Rate of an Enzyme Controlled Reaction - Beverley High School.
If you increase the concentration of the substrate (the chemicals involved) in an enzyme controlled you will speed up the chemical reaction.

https://moodle.beverleyhigh.net/mod/resource/view.php?id=6066

he way that changing the concentration of a solution affects the rate of a reaction. Be aware that this is an introductory page only. If you are interested in orders of reaction, you will find separate pages dealing with these. You can access these via the rates of reaction menu

http://www.chemguide.co.uk/physical/basicrates/concentration.html

Additional research

THE EFFECT OF CONCENTRATION ON REACTION RATES This page describes and explains the way that changing the concentration of a solution affects the rate of a reaction. Be aware that this is an introductory page only. If you are interested in orders of reaction, you will find separate pages dealing with these. You can access these via the rates of reaction menu (link at the bottom of the page). The factsWhat happens? For many reactions involving liquids or gases, increasing the concentration of the reactants increases the rate of reaction. In a few cases, increasing the concentration of one of the reactants may have little noticeable effect of the rate. These cases are discussed and explained further down this page. Don't assume that if you double the concentration of one of the reactants that you will double the rate of the reaction. It may happen like that, but the relationship may well be more complicated.
	Note: The mathematical relationship between concentration and rate of reaction is dealt with on the page about orders of reaction. If you are interested, you can use this link or read about it later via the rate of reaction menu (link at the bottom of the page).
Some examples The examples on this page all involve solutions. Changing the concentration of a gas is achieved by changing its pressure. This is covered on a separate page.
	Note: If you want to explore the effect of changing pressureon the rate of a reaction, you could use this link. Alternatively, use the link to the rates of reaction menu at the bottom of this page.
*Zinc and hydrochloric acid* In the lab, zinc granules react fairly slowly with dilute hydrochloric acid, but much faster if the acid is concentrated. *The catalytic decomposition of hydrogen peroxide* Solid manganese(IV) oxide is often used as a catalyst in this reaction. Oxygen is given off much faster if the hydrogen peroxide is concentrated than if it is dilute. *The reaction between sodium thiosulphate solution and hydrochloric acid* This is a reaction which is often used to explore the relationship between concentration and rate of reaction in introductory courses (like GCSE). When a dilute acid is added to sodium thiosulphate solution, a pale yellow precipitate of sulphur is formed. As the sodium thiosulphate solution is diluted more and more, the precipitate takes longer and longer to form.

http://www.chemguide.co.uk/physical/basicrates/concentration.html

Peer review

Peer review

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5 points

Technically perfect

Follows the classical argument

Displays an interesting and unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

Thought provoking and captivating

Clearly the product of extensive drafting and research

4 points

Technically perfect

Follows the classical argument

Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

Clearly the product of thorough drafting and research

3 points

Follows the classical argument

Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

Some evidence of drafting and research

2 points

Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

0 points

Incomplete or inadequate

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why? Thisessay ges 4 points. The topic and structure are interesting for me. .....................................................................................................................................

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
This essay need to improve researches. It need to exact more researches to get a better grade.
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Thesis
What is the thesis?
Considering the honesty , White lies are not acceptable .................................................................................................................................................

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes it is.
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
I don't agree that white lies are acceptable.
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Any other thoughts?
Many people, include me, are interested in this, it is amazing.
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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
I can see all the 5 parts of the classical argument.
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
Yes. It lead me to read interestingly and comfortably...................................................................................................................................................

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Yes, but I think this can be better when it has more universally instances and reasons.
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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes, the confirmation is well structed and have interesting contents to grab reader's attention
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes, but I think if he wrote more specific and plausible, this could be better.
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
Yes, I think conclusion is well summarized the article and emphasize his thought.
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
I think he should explain more why white lies are not acceptable and tell more specific details, instances around our life...................................................................................................................................................

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
No, I have a little different thoughts tieh this thesis.
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When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
Yes, After read this article, I could agree this thesis.
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If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
I think through confirmation, my mind was changed.
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How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
Author has to mention "white lie" more and explain the thesis easily.
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Research
Is the author using research effectively?
Yes th used research effectively.
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Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes, but sources have to be related with thesis more.
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Are the sources obvious?
Yes they are obvious. but if they are more specifie, it could be better...................................................................................................................................................

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
In my opnion, narration need more evidence to support the claims

2014년 11월 15일 토요일

Second draft

Second Draft

Everyone who lives in the earth and all of them may be interested in well-being and health. Also they may concern physical ability and physical activity everyday. Naturally, people are interested in how to enhance physical ability and how to have advanced result. Especially, in sport games, players have to enhance their physical ability and make better score. Then they have to do special things that can bring physical advance. There are many ways to improve better records, but I think concentration and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced score and enhanced physical ability the most. Before starting, you should know the definition of word, "concentration". Concentration on something involves giving all your attention to one thing. In other words, spend all of your concerns to it. Calming down one's mind is acting like control one's condition, state.

Controlling one's mind or calming down one's mind can influence the results about sport games or physical activities. There is a experiment that prove that concentration can make advanced physical ability. According to STEMWiki Hyperlibrary's study, Concentration can bring advanced result rate. The same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. This is true whether both particles are in solution, or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater.

Likewise, According to beverley high school, If you increase the concentration of the substrate in an enzyme controlled you will speed up the chemical reaction. The reason for this is as follows: The substrate and the enzyme need to come into contact with each other for a reaction to proceed. When the two meet they join for a brief moment while the reaction is catalysed, before separating. If there are very few substrate particles in the solution, it will take time for them to bump into an enzyme molecule and therefore the reaction will be slow.

Also, An adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability. We can know that physical activity can bring better results when we make adequate level of physical activity by controlling one's mind or concentration. Actually according to my survey from 50 students, 42 of 05 students feel that their physical ablity is advanced or have better records when they control their mind and concentrate more.

According to my case, when I play sports or do physical activities, I feel enhanced physical abilities and can have better scores when I calming down my mind and concentrate more than before in badminton, basketball, soccer. So I search more in physical activities not especially insports. Then, results are same. In every physical activities, I can get better score when i concentrate more. Additionally, According to my research from 50 students, 42 students feel enhanced physical ability and can get better records when they calming down and concentrate more than before.

I think Opponents who don't agree with my thoughts may say that better result and concentration or calming down are not related, they are just coincidence. However that is not realistic, just suggests. As i mentioned before, concentration cause chemical reaction to enhance reaction rate more. This means that there are relations between concentration and advanced physical advance. Additionally, I think opponents will say that concentration is just one way of mental controling and it is seemed that influence one's ability and results. However, I think concentration and calming down one's mind during sprots game are the most important way to get better results. There are many ways but these are the most influential, powerful way.

Until now, I mention about "Controlling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result". As i said, there are many evidences. Our body knows it, we know ourselves, result of research prove it. These are enough to prove this argument. Especially in physical activities, concentration and calming down one's mind have very important role. These are the most effective, powerful ways to make advanced results and enhanced physical ability. Already, many sports players know this and use in many matches. If you do these properly, you can get benefits from these in physical activities. Concentration and calming down one's mind is related with our brain, and control brain. So brain can control our body and make our physical abilities enhanced. These are not just coincidence. These are the results of body and brain's interaction. Thus, If you control or calm down your mind(escape from exited condition), you can cause advanced result and enhanced physical abilities.

Additional Research

The Effect of Concentration of Substrate on the Rate of an Enzyme Controlled Reaction

If you increase the concentration of the substrate (the chemicals involved) in an enzyme controlled you will speed up the chemical reaction. The reason for this is as follows: The substrate and the enzyme need to come into contact with each other for a reaction to proceed. When the two meet they join for a brief moment while the reaction is catalysed, before separating. If there are very few substrate particles in the solution, it will take time for them to bump into an enzyme molecule and therefore the reaction will be slow.
Increasing the substrate concentration means the chance of the collision between a substrate molecule and the enzyme is increased also. A little like packing more people into a room. The more people there are the more people you would bump into.
This does not increase indefinitely though. There comes a point when the enzyme is working as fast as it can. As soon as one substrate molecule is converted into the products, another one comes along and takes its place. The time taken for the enzyme to catalyse the reaction when they come into contact with each other limits how fast it can go.

https://moodle.beverleyhigh.net/mod/resource/view.php?id=6066

From Beverley High School.

Self-Evaluation

1) What score do you think you deserve? Here is the rubric:

I think I can get 1 point for my first draft.

2) What did you do well?
I think I do well in structures, and organic systems in my writing. Before I wrote this writing, I considered how to make organic structure, well-constructed writing very much.

3) What could you have done better?

I think if i use more researches, and search mor information, i could have done better. Also, If i take care grammar errors more, i could make better writing.

4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?

I think I do the best at confirmation of classical argument. I use some examples that is based on reality and experiment, analysis to explain effectvely.

5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?

I think I do the worst at The refutation and concession. I couldn't think certainly how opponents will think and rebute. So my The refutation and concession is weaker than other structures.

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better?

I concentrate on my structure to make audiences focus on my writing better. Additionally, I use some researches, experiment that are based reality.

2014년 10월 26일 일요일

Conclusion

My conclusion

Until now, I mention about "Controlling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result". As i said, there are many evidences. Our body knows it, we know ourselves, result of research prove it. Especially in physical activities, concentration and calming down one's mind have very important role. These are the most effective, powerful ways to make advanced results and enhanced physical ability. Already, many sports players know this and use in many matches. If you do these properly, you can get benefits from these in physical activities. Concentration and calming down one's mind is related with our brain, and control brain. So brain can control our body and make our physical abilities enhanced. These are not just coincidence. These are the results of body and brain's interaction. Thus, If you control or calm down your mind(escape from exited condition), you can cause advanced result and enhanced physical abilities.

Refutation and Concession

1. What is my thesis?
Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result

2. What is the opposite position?
Advanced result and controlling one's mind are just coincidence. There are many ways to get advanced results or enhanced physical ability in sports. That is just one kind of way.

3. What arguments can I anticipate?
a) Wether concentration can influence to human's body or not
b) Many ways to get better reports in sports.

4. How will I counter those arguments?
Contolling one's mind is the most effective way to get better scores and physical abilities. It is the most strong, direct way. So it is not concidence. Chemical reaction occur when we concentrate more. So It is natural that physical abilities are enhanced.

My Refutation and Concession

Obviously my opinion is not the popular one, despite being the correct one. There are plenty of people who will dispute my thesis. Many people may have doubts that Advanced result and controlling one's mind can cause advanced result in physical activities. They will think there are there are many ways to get advanced results or enhanced physical ability in sports and Controling and calming down one's mind is just one way so that is just concidence. However there is a research that is about result of concentration. Accodring to STEMWiki Hyperlibrary's research, The same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. This is true whether both particles are in solution, or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater. Thus, when we concentrate bore in sports, we can get advanced physical abilities.
Additionally opponents will have doubts that physical ability can cause advanced results. They may think they are not related. However according to wolter kluwer JOEM's research, an adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability in workers. From these, we can know that enhanced physical abilities can cause advanced result.
Also, opponents may think that "Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result" is just for a few people. They will think that occur to particular people. However, according to my real experiences and 42 of 50students, controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result. We can have better scores and have enhanced physical abilities during sports when we concentrate and control our condition stable.

2014년 10월 25일 토요일

The Confirmation

1. What is my thesis?
Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result 2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis?
I am using actual instances from me and friends, a thesis that is about my thesis.

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
My argument mostly based on evidence, and real instances. My research resources contains evidences that can explain my thesis. Also my resources contain real instances about my thesis that is from 50 students.

My Confirmation

Perhaps one of the challenges to adequately discussing this topic is the wether contolling and calming down one's mind can bring enhanced physical abilities and better records in sports. Let's talk about effect of concentration first. Concentration change many things in our body. Especially, chemical reactions occur when we concentrate. Accodring to STEMWiki Hyperlibrary's research, The same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. This is true whether both particles are in solution, or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater. Thus, when we concentrate bore in sports, we can get advanced physical abilities.

According to my case, when I play sports or do physical activities, I feel enhanced physical abilities and can have better scores if i calming down my mind and concentrate more than before in badminton, basketball, soccer. So I experiment in more physical activities not especially insports. Results are same. In every physical activities, I can get better score when i concentrate more. Additionally, According to my research from 50 students, 42 students feel enhanced physical ability and can get better records when they calming down and concentrate more than before.

Also according to one research about physical activity and results, they said an adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability in aging workers. From these, We can infer that enhanced physical activities can influence results. That can bring better results.

Opponents may say that better result and concentration or calming down are not related, they are just coincidence. However that is not realistic. As i mentioned before, concentration cause chemical reaction to enhance reaction rate more. This means that there are relations between concentration and advanced physical advance. Additionally, opponents will say that concentration is just one way of mental controling and it is seemed that influence one's ability and results. but, I think concentration or calming down one's mind during sprots game are the most important way to get better results. There are many ways but these are the most influential, powerful way.

The Narration

My persuasive argument thesis is: Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result

1. What do people already know about my topic?

Everyone knows that controlling one's mind can influence the results. Everyone knows that calming down one's mind can influence the results.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

http://journals.lww.com/joem/Abstract/2000/09000/Work_Ability,_Physical_Activity,_and.12.aspx
- It Explains that an adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability. We can infer that physical activity can bring better results when we make adequate level of physical activity by controlling one's mind or concentration.

http://chemwiki.ucdavis.edu/Physical_Chemistry/Kinetics/Rate_Laws/Reaction_Mechanisms/Reaction_Mechanisms/The_Effect_of_Concentration_on_Rate_of_Reaction#Contributors

- It explains that the same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. This is true whether both particles are in solution, or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater. Thus, if we concentrate more, we can get advanced physical abilities.

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

controlling one's mind and condition and calming down one's mind during sport games or physical activity is very important part. Because that behaviors can enhance physical ability so they can get better scores. Also through these behaviors, they can control their mind stable.

Controlling one's mind or calming down one's mind can influence the results about sport games or physical activities. According to STEMWiki Hyperlibrary's study, Concentration can bring advanced result rate. The same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. This is true whether both particles are in solution, or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater.
Also, an adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability. We can know that physical activity can bring better results when we make adequate level of physical activity by controlling one's mind or concentration. Actually according to my survey from 50 students, 42 of 05 students feel that their physical ablity is advanced or have better records when they control their mind and concentrate more.
From these we can know that controlling one's mind and condition and calming down one's mind during sport games or physical activity is very important part. Because that behaviors can enhance physical ability so they can get better scores. Also through these behaviors, they can control their mind stable.

Introduction

First Draft

Everyone who lives in the earth, may be interested in well-being and health. Also they may have concerned with physical ability and physical activity. Naturally, people are interested in how to enhance physical ability and have advanced result. Especially, in sport games, players have to enhance their physical ability and make better score. There are many ways to improve better records, but I think concentration and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced score and enhanced physical ability. Before starting, you should know the definition of word, "concentration". Concentration on something involves giving all your attention to one thing. In other words, spend all of your concerns to it. Calming down one's mind is acting like control one's condition, state.

Concentration during sports, physical activity can cause advanced result and enhanced physical ability. It means that players can get more score or do better in sports when they control their mind. Because concentration bring increased, enhanced rate of reactions. Accodring to STEMWiki Hyperlibrary's research, The same argument applies whether the reaction involves collision between two different particles or two of the same particle. In order for any reaction to happen, those particles must first collide. This is true whether both particles are in solution, or whether one is in solution and the other a solid. If the concentration is higher, the chances of collision are greater.

Actually in my case, When I play sports or do physical activity, if i concentrate more or calm down my mind, i can do better and have good score because of enhanced physical ability. I research the question that is about "Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result" to 50 students. 42 of 50 students answer that they can feel enhanced physical ability when they control their mind or concentrate more. according to this survey, we know that almost people can have advanced result from controling their mind to stable condition.

Opponents may say that better result and concentration or calming down are not related, they are just coincidence. However that is not realistic. As i mentioned before, concentration cause chemical reaction to enhance reaction rate more. This means that there are relations between concentration and advanced physical advance. Additionally, opponents will say that concentration is just one way of mental controling and it is seemed that influence one's ability and results. but, I think concentration or calming down one's mind during sprots game are the most important way to get better results. There are many ways but these are the most influential, powerful way.

Classical Argument Outline

1. The introduction, which warms up the audience, establishes goodwill and rapport with the readers, and announces the general theme or thesis of the argument.

I will start by describing the situation everyone is already familiar with: "Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result." Then I will shift attention to definition of concentraion and effect of concentraion or calming down one's mind. Also I will explain my and people's real experiences. Finally I will end with my thesis, "If people concentrate or calm one's mind to stable condition, they can get better score in sports game or reinforce their physical level."

2. The narration, which summarizes relevant background material, provides any information the audience needs to know about the environment and circumstances that produce the argument, and set up the stakes-what’s at risk in this question. In academic writing, this often takes the form of a literature review.

I will summarize the research I've done and provide an explanation for how concentraion or calming down's effect in sports and physical ability. I will give a real instances when people can fill their reinforced pyhsical ability and have a better record in sport game.

3. The confirmation,which lays out in a logical order (usually strongest to weakest or most obvious to most subtle) the claims that support the thesis, providing evidence for each claim.

I will start by examining how concentration influence to human and what kind of results are influenced by concentration. I will examine people's condition and result's relationship according to researches, real instances. I will describe reinforced physical ability based on people's psychology. I will examine the statistical evidence that different results between people who calm down and who don't control condition.

4. The refutation and concession, which looks at opposing viewpoints to the writer’s claims, anticipating objections from the audience, and allowing as much of the opposing viewpoints as possible without weakening the thesis.

I think opponents will say better result and concentration or calming down are not related, they are just coincidence. I think opponents will say concentration is just one way of mental controling and it is seemed that itinfluence one's ability and results.

5. The summation, which provides a strong conclusion, amplifying the force of the argument, and showing the readers that this solution is the best at meeting the circumstances.

I will close with a summary of my previous points, then i will explain concentration and calming down one's mind's effect again to emphasize that more . I will end with a reaffirmation of my original thesis.

Articulate argument.

1) My argument Controling and calming down one's mind during physical activity can cause advanced result
I want to argue that influence of controling or calming down one's mind. Wether controling one's condition can cause better result and enhanced physical ability. In physical activity, concentration and controling one's condition is very important. Results become different according to that.
2) How I found my argument Explain how your research helped you find your argument. Or, in other words, how did your research evolve into your argument? Start with your research question.
My first research question was, Students need more Physical activity and PE class than major subjects? I think children and students need more physical activity than just studying, so i chose this article. This article helped corroborate that theory. As I continued researching, it seemed obvious that everyone agreed that physical activity is necessary to students and it benefits a lot. I thought if I wrote an article saying the same thing, it would be boring. I started looking at the other interesting articles. What is effect of physical activity? What things can enhance physical activity? Articles like this one helped me quantify real effect of the way that enhance physical ability. Eventually I realized that controling one's condition, calming down, and concentration can enhance physical activity.
3) New research questions What do you still need to know? What is your research plan?
I have several questions that need to be resolved.
a) What is definition of concentration?
b) what is effect of concentration and contoling mind?
c) What kind of advanced, better result occur when we contol our mind and concnetrate during physical activity.

4) Connections to the Harvard Sampler How is your argument connected to the Harvard Sampler? ANY CONNECTION IS VALID. Please focus on choosing a good argument first, then think about how it is related to the Harvard Sampler. I will help you think of the connection if necessary.
This argument has many connections to the Harvard Sampler. First, it obviously connected with "human mind" Because According to human's mind, their physical ability can changed. Also controling mind and concentration, like brain working can influence physical result

NOTE: Here I connected the argument to all 4 Harvard Sampler topics. THIS IS NOT NECESSARY. You only need to connect it to one, but can connect it to more if you want.

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Research

Work Ability, Physical Activity, and Cardiorespiratory Fitness: 2-year Results From Project Active

An adequate level of physical activity may maintain or promote work ability in aging workers. Project Active is a randomized trial comparing a Lifestyle physical activity program with a Structured exercise program in sedentary but healthy adults aged 35 to 60 years. Subjects in both groups received 6 months of intensive intervention followed by 18 months of active follow-up. The total number of subjects was 235, from which 80 subjects participated in the work ability assessment. Primary outcome measures were energy expenditure (kcal · kg⁻¹ · day⁻¹), cardiorespiratory fitness (peak oxygen uptake in ml · min⁻¹ · kg⁻¹), and the Work Ability Index. At 6 months, daily energy expenditure had increased significantly over baseline (mean ± SD, from 33.0 ± 0.9 to 34.4 ± 1.8 kcal · kg⁻¹ · day⁻¹) and was maintained over baseline at 24 months (34.0 ± 2.5 kcal · kg⁻¹ · day⁻¹). The significant increase in energy expenditure was observed particularly in moderate levels of activity. The average percentage of body fat was significantly higher at baseline compared with 6 months and 24 months. Peak oxygen uptake increased from baseline significantly during the first 6 months (from 29.6 ± 5.7 to 30.6 ± 6.3 ml · min⁻¹ · kg⁻¹) and decreased to the baseline level (29.1 ± 5.5 ml · min⁻¹ · kg⁻¹) at 24 months. At baseline, the average Work Ability Index was 44.2 ± 4.0, and it remained unchanged at 6 months (44.4 ± 3.9) and at 24 months (44.2 ± 3.1). In conclusion, a 2-year physical activity intervention increased daily energy expenditure, reduced body fat, and maintained peak oxygen uptake in healthy, middle-aged, sedentary subjects. The average Work Ability Index score at baseline was excellent and did not change during the 2-year physical activity interventions.

- http://journals.lww.com/joem/Abstract/2000/09000/Work_Ability,_Physical_Activity,_and.12.aspx

This page describes and explains the way that changing the concentration of a solution affects the rate of a reaction. Be aware that this is an introductory page only.

Introduction

For many reactions involving liquids or gases, increasing the concentration of the reactants increases the rate of reaction. In a few cases, increasing the concentration of one of the reactants may have little noticeable effect of the rate. These cases are discussed and explained further down this page. Don't assume that if you double the concentration of one of the reactants that you will double the rate of the reaction. It may happen like that, but the relationship may well be more complicated.

http://chemwiki.ucdavis.edu/Physical_Chemistry/Kinetics/Rate_Laws/Reaction_Mechanisms/Reaction_Mechanisms/The_Effect_of_Concentration_on_Rate_of_Reaction#Contributors