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5 points
- Technically perfect
- Follows the classical argument
- Displays an interesting and unique perspective on a highly specialized topic
- Thought provoking and captivating
- Clearly the product of extensive drafting and research
4 points
- Technically perfect
- Follows the classical argument
- Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic
- Clearly the product of thorough drafting and research
- Follows the classical argument
- Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic
- Some evidence of drafting and research
2 points
- Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic
- Incomplete or inadequate
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why? Thisessay ges 4 points. The topic and structure are interesting for me. .....................................................................................................................................
How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
This essay need to improve researches. It need to exact more researches to get a better grade.
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Thesis
What is the thesis?
Considering the honesty , White lies are not acceptable .................................................................................................................................................
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes it is.
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
I don't agree that white lies are acceptable.
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Any other thoughts?
Many people, include me, are interested in this, it is amazing.
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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
I can see all the 5 parts of the classical argument.
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
Yes. It lead me to read interestingly and comfortably...................................................................................................................................................
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Yes, but I think this can be better when it has more universally instances and reasons.
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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes, the confirmation is well structed and have interesting contents to grab reader's attention
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes, but I think if he wrote more specific and plausible, this could be better.
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
Yes, I think conclusion is well summarized the article and emphasize his thought.
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
I think he should explain more why white lies are not acceptable and tell more specific details, instances around our life...................................................................................................................................................
Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
No, I have a little different thoughts tieh this thesis.
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When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
Yes, After read this article, I could agree this thesis.
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If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
I think through confirmation, my mind was changed.
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How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
Author has to mention "white lie" more and explain the thesis easily.
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Research
Is the author using research effectively?
Yes th used research effectively.
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Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes, but sources have to be related with thesis more.
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Are the sources obvious?
Yes they are obvious. but if they are more specifie, it could be better...................................................................................................................................................
Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
In my opnion, narration need more evidence to support the claims
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